Cocooned in
sanctuary of your love,
I breathe serenity of life
Changed me
an embedded
embodiment,
a light lit in you.
Renewed mind and body
as pearl in oyster.
Soothing beacon
fortified fortress
tower of my strength....
Bestowed fragrance
of blooming serenade,
castle in weary battles
and ferocious tempests.
I can notice at least three of your blogs, and you write spontaneously.... Right now, I dont want to comment on your poem, as I dont think I am eligible to comment. But you have a good vocabulary and I am sure, if you write avidly like this, one day you will be known as a good writer both in Malayalam and English. I guess, you should give a little more attention in what you are expressing... Or in other words what you are conveying... Over all message is okay, but when you try to have rhymes and when you play with wordings, please give more attention to the inner meaning.... I would say, your writing skill is really good and how spontaneously and avidly you write really amazing.. Keep it up Preetha.. Shemej.(That is my name.)
ReplyDeleteShemej.. very happy to read ur cteative criticism. I will change the content as per ur thoughts. I understood what you meant. Thanks a lot for ur visit and valuable suggestion.
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